From conception to 8th grade, I lived in the tiny state of Connecticut. I lived in colonial style houses with big backyards and I knew every family in my neighborhood down to the name of their dog. Life was simple.
I then moved to a large city in the Bay Area in California. For those who may not know, the Bay Area is the cluster of cities surrounding San Francisco including San Francisco itself. Right off the bat, I had a hard time adjusting. The 8th grade was a horrible time to move since everyone were friends with each other since birth and grew up in the social bubble that is the Bay Area.
After years of adjusting, I finally got the hang of it Sophomore year of high school. I joined sports teams and clubs and I expanded my social circle. My mind really opened up to the free will of the West Coast. I began to realize how much fun it was to live in California. You could practically do anything you want (as long as you’re willing to drive in the freeway traffic). I was opened up to new practices and interests like yoga, hiking and exploration, veganism, fashion, and to discover your passion and what you were put on Earth to do.
Then my Senior year rolled around, and at the same time, California was experiencing major inflation. The average 3 bedroom 2 bath house was going for roughly $1 million dollars on the market. All around me new housing complexes were being built; houses on houses of the same exact house, just with a different color scheme. I started to see the “golden hills” of the valley around my city for what it really was; burnt and dead.
The blur of the headlights on the freeway every night I drove past it, feeling sorry for the poor parents who want to get home to their children by dinner time but their commute is an hour and a half. I started to dislike where I was. I looked forward to visiting my family back in Connecticut, where the water was clear and the grass and hills were green. That’s when I decided to do what is better for my soul; move back to Connecticut.
Of course, I didn’t choose Connecticut (CCSU to be exact) just because of looks. It boiled down to out-of-state tuition for the first year will still be cheaper than in-state tuition in California. I also preferred the social bubble that is New England. I liked being so close to other states and other populous cities rather than just being close to San Francisco. I missed having four distinct seasons and seeing snow on Christmas. I missed seeing New England Patriots fans on the daily. I missed my extended family. I missed it all.
However, after living here, I do miss California. I miss my friends, including my soul sister who I did everything with. I miss the long drives to the beach. I miss the dry heat (I don’t think anyone likes humidity). I miss the vast array of vegan and vegetarian options that was actually good. I miss the few people that had golden souls who would lay in hammocks with me and sing our favorite indie songs.
Upon further reflection, I realized that although my heart may ache for the people I left behind, I am beyond grateful and lucky to have experienced what I have. I am so different from my fellow classmates here in Connecticut, and I am grateful for that. I am happy I chose to settle down here in Connecticut, and I am happy that I can fly to California to visit whenever I want. I am happy with how my life has turned out thus far.
Do you agree or disagree with the statement that a library is a good place for study? Use your reasons and specific examples to support your idea.
Could you revise my essay and give me some feedback. thank you
To my view, a library is a good place for school students. The students who spend an extra time on learning after a regular class find the library satisfying due to online materials, books on shelves and a good atmosphere.
First, Students can surf the internet for online materials to support studying outside a classroom. Students do not have to pay money because an internet service is available to them without charge. They just type a password of the student card on a computer code interface so that they will be able to access to online learning sources. Moreover, there are many computers around the library; therefore, they do not have to rush to play a computer early morning. Also, an internet service is based on a broadband network, of which the speed is faster than any other. This is so appropriate that students will be able to quickly learn through online classes.
Second, students can search for books which are useful to self-learning. There are several books on various subjects. Because of this, they do not get riled up only because of no preferred textbooks. Furthermore, students do not have to pay money to find a textbook in a library to read and practice exercises inside the textbook.
Finally, students pay off if they spend extra times studying in a library due to a good atmosphere. Students feel comfortable while reading a book in a library. An air conditioning system releases cold air which the students are fond of in order to support extra learning exercises. Besides, there are no sounds which affect students' learning beyond a regular basis because it is one of the library's rules to punish everyone who make a noisy sound.
In conclusion, when finishing a normal class, students who think learning in class is not enough and still want to increase more time to study can go to a library which has a proper temperature to find books and even look for online materials to help do school assignments.
To my view, a library is a good place for school students. The students who spend an (no "an") extra time on learning after a regular class (regular classes) find the library satisfying (can satisfy them) due to online materials, books on shelves and a good atmosphere.
I don't agree with you about the online materials, it can also be done at home, right?
Maybe you should focus on the characteristic part of library.
That is the essay that i wrote last month. whether some information is not acceptable is not problematic because my writing skill at that time was bad, but today, i know how to effectively write an essay.
Anyways thank you for your feedback.
You can improve your writing skill only in a month. It's great. I'm preparing to take the Toefl test 2 months later, can you please give me some tips?
My strategies that i choose to improve my writing skill.
I take an advanced writing course for two months, while i have BARRON TOEFL ESSAY for self-study at home.
Another tip is to write four essays per week, and let your teachers revise them. Their Feedback can guide you how to better write an essay.
Bear in mind that opinions are somewhat difficult to brainstorm, i still do not find this skill satisfying. Anyway, writing three-to-four essays per week can help you brainstorming ideas to be put into your essay outlines.
Remember, when you practice writing the essay, do not worry about the time. just write until you think your essay has coherence and unity. But your writing time should be in one hour.
If you think you are proficient in your writing skill, you can write within thirty minutes,
The more you write, the more you are confident to pass the toefl essay exam within 30 minutes.
The way to improve vocabularies is to read English texts such as atimes.com, its patterns of language is suitable for the toefl essay nytimes.com-- more academic vocabularies and structures
Grammar for writing is not difficult if you read and practice the grammar exam everyday. For me, grammar is easy, and i always get a high score from the grammar section. Therefore, it is easy to put grammar rules into my essay though there are some errors, especially about Article A AN THE and Verb Forms.
I hope the ways that i practice my writing skill contribute benefits to your toefl exam one way or another.
Thanks for your tips, Keng!
I must practice more to get high score for my next Toefl exam.
i have read the tips given to tuan.
it will help me as i prepare for the IELTS.
Nice site for TOEFL iBT Practicing Online is i-courses. Essays are evaluated by real TOEFL teachers who deliver comprehensive and creative feedback.
You mean practicing The online Toefl IBT without charge or any payment.
I checked it, we must pay to practice each skill or a completed test.
personally i think that yours is good. but i like the second paragraph the most